Some people think that in order to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicles should be banned in city centers, while others consider this to be an unrealistic solution. discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Nowadays, many urban areas face different
dificulties
related to Correct your spelling
difficulties
over population
. Traffic congestion is the major issue Correct your spelling
overpopulation
from
that, some Change preposition
of
people
claim that private Use synonyms
Use synonyms
vehicle
should be restricted in cities Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
while
others argue it is not a successful solution for Linking Words
this
problem. I Linking Words
strogly
believe that private Correct your spelling
strongly
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vehicle
should Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
ban
in city Wrong verb form
be banned
area
. I will explore both Fix the agreement mistake
areas
side
of Change to a plural noun
sides
this
statement and give my opinion Linking Words
further
in Linking Words
this
essay.
On the one hand, when the government introduce alternative Linking Words
transport
methods for Use synonyms
citizons
Correct your spelling
citizens
this
traffic issue can address wisely. They can improve their public Linking Words
transport
and they can introduce park and ride service. From Use synonyms
this
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service
Add a comma
service,
restric
unessaccery Correct your spelling
restrict
Use synonyms
vehicle
enter to cities and it will help to concern about Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
environment
. Add an article
the environment
For example
, BBC published one research carried out in London Linking Words
city
showed after introducing Capitalize word
City
this
park and ride service, their traffic jam decreased Linking Words
40
%. Apparently, if Change preposition
by 40
government
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the government
able
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is able
fund
Fix the infinitive
to fund
this
project more they can reduce Linking Words
this
problem Linking Words
more
than 50%. Change preposition
by more
Moreover
, Linking Words
people
can save their monthly fuel Use synonyms
cost
as well and it will Fix the agreement mistake
costs
mittigate
their Correct your spelling
mitigate
finacial
problems Correct your spelling
financial
some
extent.
Change preposition
to some
On the other hand
, Linking Words
eventhough
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even though
people
have private Use synonyms
Use synonyms
vehicle
they will lose their privacy and Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
comfortable
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comfort
while
traveling . Linking Words
This
is the major reason Linking Words
people
oppose Use synonyms
for ban
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banning
own
cars. When they Wrong verb form
owning
use
public Use synonyms
transport
it is not Use synonyms
comfortable
Rephrase
as comfortable
than
their own car. Change preposition
as
For example
, Linking Words
while
you Linking Words
use
your own Use synonyms
vehicle
you can eat, talk or Use synonyms
laught
with Correct your spelling
laugh
the
Change the word
your
traveling
partner, nobody Change the spelling
travelling
concern
about your Add a missing verb
is concern
behaviuor
but if you Correct your spelling
behaviour
use
Use synonyms
a
public Correct article usage
apply
transport
others will judge you Use synonyms
while
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traveling
. Change the spelling
travelling
This
will be Linking Words
stressfull
for daily travellers.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
stressful
private
Correct article usage
a private
vehicle
ban will be more Use synonyms
benificial
for cities. In the above Correct your spelling
beneficial
paragraph
I have mentioned some major Add a comma
paragraph,
benifits
and drawbacks. Correct your spelling
benefits
However
, private Linking Words
Use synonyms
vehicle
Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
reduce
will bring stressful work force and they can Verb problem
apply
use
their driving time for something else.Use synonyms
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The introduction and conclusion are present, which is positive. However, you should ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the points you will discuss, and your conclusion must effectively summarize the discussion and restate your opinion.
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