Some people think that in order to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicles should be banned in city centers, while others consider this to be an unrealistic solution. discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Nowadays, many urban areas face different
dificulties
related to Correct your spelling
difficulties
over population
. Traffic congestion is the major issue Correct your spelling
overpopulation
from
that, some Change preposition
of
people
claim that private vehicle
should be restricted in cities Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
while
others argue it is not a successful solution for this
problem. I strogly
believe that private Correct your spelling
strongly
vehicle
should Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
ban
in city Wrong verb form
be banned
area
. I will explore both Fix the agreement mistake
areas
side
of Change to a plural noun
sides
this
statement and give my opinion further
in this
essay.
On the one hand, when the government introduce alternative transport
methods for citizons
Correct your spelling
citizens
this
traffic issue can address wisely. They can improve their public transport
and they can introduce park and ride service. From this
service
Add a comma
service,
restric
unessaccery Correct your spelling
restrict
vehicle
enter to cities and it will help to concern about Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
environment
. Add an article
the environment
For example
, BBC published one research carried out in London city
showed after introducing Capitalize word
City
this
park and ride service, their traffic jam decreased 40
%. Apparently, if Change preposition
by 40
government
Correct article usage
the government
able
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is able
fund
Fix the infinitive
to fund
this
project more they can reduce this
problem more
than 50%. Change preposition
by more
Moreover
, people
can save their monthly fuel cost
as well and it will Fix the agreement mistake
costs
mittigate
their Correct your spelling
mitigate
finacial
problems Correct your spelling
financial
some
extent.
Change preposition
to some
On the other hand
, eventhough
Correct your spelling
even though
people
have private vehicle
they will lose their privacy and Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
comfortable
Replace the word
comfort
while
traveling . This
is the major reason people
oppose for ban
Wrong verb form
banning
own
cars. When they Wrong verb form
owning
use
public transport
it is not comfortable
Rephrase
as comfortable
than
their own car. Change preposition
as
For example
, while
you use
your own vehicle
you can eat, talk or laught
with Correct your spelling
laugh
the
Change the word
your
traveling
partner, nobody Change the spelling
travelling
concern
about your Add a missing verb
is concern
behaviuor
but if you Correct your spelling
behaviour
use
a
public Correct article usage
apply
transport
others will judge you while
traveling
. Change the spelling
travelling
This
will be stressfull
for daily travellers.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
stressful
private
Correct article usage
a private
vehicle
ban will be more benificial
for cities. In the above Correct your spelling
beneficial
paragraph
I have mentioned some major Add a comma
paragraph,
benifits
and drawbacks. Correct your spelling
benefits
However
, private vehicle
Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
reduce
will bring stressful work force and they can Verb problem
apply
use
their driving time for something else.Submitted by Sa.inaka on
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coherence cohesion
Your logical structuring needs improvement. While you mention various aspects, the connections between them and transitions could be more seamless. Rather than jumping between ideas, develop each one fully before moving to the next point.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, which is positive. However, you should ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the points you will discuss, and your conclusion must effectively summarize the discussion and restate your opinion.
coherence cohesion
You supported your main points with an example, like the BBC research in London. To strengthen your argument, be more consistent in using specific examples for all main points, not just one.
task achievement
Your completion of the task is recognized, as you attempt to cover the prompt's requirements by discussing both sides. However, the response could be more complete with further development of your ideas and a deeper analysis of the issue at hand.
task achievement
Although ideas are presented, they often lack clarity and comprehensiveness. Strive for a clear articulation of your points with well-defined arguments that collectively address the task thoroughly.
task achievement
You included a relevant example to illustrate the potential benefits of banning private vehicles. Continue providing specific examples to substantiate your points, ensuring they are relevant and enhance your argument.