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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 of knowing other languages. Both sides have valid points and these points are discussed in the following paragraphs
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 my opinion. First and foremost, most of the learners
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 to get ease with settling down and
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 in other nations.
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rural Indians
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country is the main reason for
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 for several other
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 community, he/she must
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 interpreter, as it is a handsome salary job that capable
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure the introduction and conclusion are clearly presented and summarise the main points effectively. The introduction should clearly state the purpose of the essay and the conclusion should succinctly wrap up your discussion and state your opinion.
logical structure
Use a clear and logical structure throughout the essay to guide the reader smoothly from one point to the next. Paragraphs should focus on a single main idea with sentences that link together cohesively.
supported main points
Support your main points with clear and specific examples or explanations. Avoid vague statements and ensure each paragraph adds value to your argument or explanation.
complete response
Address all parts of the task, ensuring that you discuss both views and provide a clear personal opinion. Make sure your ideas are comprehensive and extend your arguments where necessary to fully satisfy the prompt.
clear comprehensive ideas
Strive to express your ideas clearly and ensure they are easily understood. Work on articulating comprehensive ideas and avoid overly complex or convoluted sentences that may confuse the reader.
relevant specific examples
Include examples that are relevant and specific to the topic, and ensure they effectively support your points. Avoid generic statements that do not add substantial information to your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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