Learning at university would be more effective if men and women were educated separetely. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that university studies would be more effective if
men
and women
were educated separately. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument.
On the one hand, if women
and men
study
together, the number of students will increase. Obviously, where there are many, there will be competition. Indeed, where there is competition, there will be growth. It will be easier to understand the topics if they study
together. Then
they master the subjects well and perfectly because they are ashamed of each other. As a result
, both men
and women
learn equally. One does not have too much or too little knowledge. In the meantime, they are not discriminated against because of their knowledge. Because both men
and women
have learned the same. Naturally, they they
understand each other's character well. Remove the redundancy
apply
Thus
, in the future, even when they build a family, the war will live
without quarrels.
Verb problem
continue
Similarly
, Alhamdulillah, we are Muslims. We should act like a believer. In our religion, an unmarried man and woman cannot walk together, work, or even study
together. Learning is obligatory for every man and woman. Moreover
, it is appropriate to divide men
and women
in the education system. However
, in the most prestigious universities in the world, separate education is preferred. In all universities, women
and men
study
together. But I believe that one day men
and women
will study
separately and it will pay off.
In conclusion, We should not think of the present world, but the hereafter. Because this
world is transitory. Based on this
, we should be faithful to our religion and arrange for men
and women
to study
separately. It definitely pays off.Submitted by saydusmonovasomiddin94 on
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