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Ambition is being emphasized in today’s society. How important do you think it is for people who want to succeed in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic?

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In the realm of accomplishment, today's society values
an
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ambition
 as a must-have mentality to succeed in
life
 pursuit. In my viewpoint, to some extent,
ambition
 plays both crucial and significant roles as a strong drive for someone to pursue almost anything that they want in
life
. Everybody has a goal in many aspects of our
life
, from work, health, and
relationship
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. Some people believe that having a dream is not enough to pursue something we desire
to
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. Here,
ambition
 will fit its role as
a
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fuel to constantly ignite the spirit in pursuit of achievements. Getting accepted into Harvard University,
for instance
, is a dream for some people around the world to study in
the
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 world-class university. Without a strong
ambition
, even the smartest people on earth have no chance because they are not motivated enough to compete.
Moreover
, having an
ambition
 is
also
 useful when we are faced with hardship moments. We do not always
achieving
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 everything we plan out, sometimes we will fail to do so. Here,
ambition
 plays a role
to encourage
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 us to not easily
giving
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 up because our dream is much
important
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 than just a temporary failure. A
japanese
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 principle,
for example
, teaches us how hard moments
it
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gets
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, even
we
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failed
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 7 times, we have to get up 8 times.
That is
 the embodiment of strong
ambition
 within someone. In conclusion, I do believe that having an
ambition
 is a must-have mentality to succeed in
life
 pursuit because it
plays igniting
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 our fuel in achieving dreams
,
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 and
helping
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 us to not easily give up when we are faced
in
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with
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 difficult experiences
while
 in the middle of
process
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a process
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.
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The essay needs a clearer introduction that directly addresses the question of ambition being positive or negative, followed by a thesis statement outlining your position.
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The body paragraphs should have clear topic sentences that directly relate to the main argument presented in the introduction.
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Use a wider range of cohesive devices to improve the coherence of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistency in tense and perspective throughout the essay to maintain cohesion.
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Support main points with more detailed and specific examples directly related to the question posed.
coherence cohesion
Conclude with a summary of the main points discussed and reiterate your position clearly, relating back to the question.

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