The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket ( S ) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The map of
Garlsdon
shows 2 possible planned sites of
a
new Change preposition
for
supermarket
,
Overall
, Garlsdon
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Carlson
boarders
other towns: Correct your spelling
borders
Hindon
in the north west
; Bransdon in the Correct your spelling
northwest
south west
; and Cransdon in the Correct your spelling
southwest
south east
. Correct your spelling
southeast
Site
1 is close to Hindon
, and Site
2 is close to the other 2 towns. It is obvious that site
may serve Correct article usage
the site
higher
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a higher
number of
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apply
population
of Garlsdon
Garlsdon
has the
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a
population
of 65,000 living in the housing area that surrounds the town
centre
. Although
there is not
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no
the
traffic zone in the Correct article usage
apply
centre
, the town
can be accessed with a railway and 3 main roads, connecting the town
with Hindon
, Bransdon, and Cranston. Also
, The town
has Correct article usage
apply
a
industrial sites in the north and south; which are surrounded by the countryside.
For the possible Correct article usage
apply
site
1, the supermarket
would be founded in the countryside
in the north west
, which is 12 km to Correct your spelling
northwest
Hindon
with 10,000 of population
. There are
a railway and a main road that help the Correct subject-verb agreement
is
supermarket
become accessible for people of these 2 towns. On the contrary
, site
2 of the supermarket
would be in the city centre
where the traffic is prohibited. Nonetheless
, the supermarket
can be reached via a railway and other
3 main roads coming into the Correct article usage
the other
centre
. Moreover
, this
site
may serve more locals living in the city and housing area of Garlsdon
as well as
15,000
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the 15,000
population
of Brandon
(16 km away)and 29,000 population
of Cranston (35 km away).Submitted by dondollaraus on
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