The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the amin features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the amin features, and make comparison where relevant.
The given
process
illustrates the mechanism of
sugar
production from
sugar
cane. There are seven steps from
agricultural
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stage to industrial treatment. From the beginning, the
sugar
cane growing procedure takes around one to one and a half years, during
this
procedure. After
first
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stage, harvesting continues. Using machines for harvesting would be more effective and plausible;
however
, sometimes farmers’ hands are useful to harvest delicate
part
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.
Third
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The third
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step is crusting
sugar
canes
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cane
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. We put harvested
sugar
canes into a squeeze machine to obtain the
sugar
juice
.
Thereafter
,
sugar
juice
is purified by passing a limestone filter. Fifth, to make syrup, we boil
sugar
cane
juice
and evaporate the water. Throughout
this
stage, the amount of
juice
decrease
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,
while
the density of
juice
rise
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rises
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.
Next,
the syrup goes through the
process
of a centrifuge, which
disseminate
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sugar
crystals from syrup.
Finally
, to get the complete appearance of
sugar
, the drying and cooling
process
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are substantial. After finishing seven stages,
sugar
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the sugar
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for sale is ready.
Manufacturing
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The manufacturing
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process
for making
sugar
is
long-term
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a long-term
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project, which lasts more than one and a half years and has delicate and complex procedures.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, sugar, juice with synonyms.
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