The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the amin features, and make comparison where relevant.
The given
process
illustrates the mechanism of sugar
production from sugar
cane. There are seven steps from agricultural
stage to industrial treatment.
From the beginning, the Add an article
the agricultural
sugar
cane growing procedure takes around one to one and a half years, during this
procedure. After first
stage, harvesting continues. Using machines for harvesting would be more effective and plausible; Change the article
the first
however
, sometimes farmers’ hands are useful to harvest delicate part
. Fix the agreement mistake
parts
Third
step is crusting Change the article
The third
sugar
canes
. We put harvested Fix the agreement mistake
cane
sugar
canes into a squeeze machine to obtain the sugar
juice
. Thereafter
, sugar
juice
is purified by passing a limestone filter. Fifth, to make syrup, we boil sugar
cane juice
and evaporate the water. Throughout this
stage, the amount of juice
decrease
, Correct subject-verb agreement
decreases
while
the density of juice
rise
. Correct subject-verb agreement
rises
Next,
the syrup goes through the process
of a centrifuge, which disseminate
Change the verb form
disseminates
sugar
crystals from syrup. Finally
, to get the complete appearance of sugar
, the drying and cooling process
are substantial. After finishing seven stages, Fix the agreement mistake
processes
sugar
for sale is ready.
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the sugar
Manufacturing
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The manufacturing
process
for making sugar
is long-term
project, which lasts more than one and a half years and has delicate and complex procedures.Add an article
a long-term
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, sugar, juice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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