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Is it useful to recycle glass bottles? Shoul people throw wasted bottle away? Your opinion

#glass #bottles #shoul #people #bottle
Dear friend, thank you for your letter. I’m always glad to get letters from you. Now what about your questions
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 I’ve noticed a lot of changes in my city. Most part of
parks
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the parks
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 were rebuilt. Now they look better. Appeared a lot of electric busses, were opened new
metroways
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motorways
. Now Moscow is sharing
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 horizon.
Few
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 years ago MKAD was the border of Moscow. Now we can see a lot of skyscrapers beyond it.
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i
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 like changes in my town. It
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became
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 easier and faster to go from point A to point B in comfortable conditions. Do you want to see some changes in your town? What are they? Does your town
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a skyscrapers
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? I’m sorry,
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 need to go to help my mom with cooking. Write back soon. Best wishes, Timur
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure and logical flow between ideas, making it difficult to follow your arguments. Consider using a standard essay format with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Use connective words to improve the cohesion between your sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
The given response does not address the topic of the usefulness of recycling glass bottles, nor does it discuss whether people should throw away wasted bottles. To improve, directly answer the questions posed by the prompt and focus your essay on presenting a clear and relevant opinion on the topic.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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