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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates world
illiteracy
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rates
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 estimated by area and sex for the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, among 6
regions
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 there are three
regions
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 with the highest
illiteracy
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rates
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: Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, and South
Asia
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. Three
regions
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 have the lowest
illiteracy
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rates
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: Developed countries, Latin American / Caribbean, and East
Asia
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 / Oceania. In all
regions
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women
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 represent the biggest share of the illiterate population.
According to
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 the chart, the most literate people live in Developed Countries with
illiteracy
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rates
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 of about 1% among
men
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 and about 3% among
women
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. In Latin America / Caribbean the
percentage
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 of illiterate
men
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 is approximately 10 times higher than in Developed Countries and the
percentage
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 of illiterate
women
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 is about 13%. In East
Asia
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 / Oceania the
illiteracy
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percentage
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 is about 8% and 20% respectively. The most significant
percentage
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 of illiterate people is in South
Asia
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 where about 35% of
men
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 and about 56% of
women
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 couldn't read. Arab States are close to the South
Asia
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 proportion of
illiteracy
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 with about 28% and 52% respectively.
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, Sub-Saharan / Africa region has close
rates
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 to three most illiterate
regions
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. In that region about 31% of
men
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 couldn't read and about 48% of
women
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rates, regions, asia, women, men, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 9 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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