The diagrams below show the changes that has taken place in a village park.

The diagrams below show the changes that has taken place in a village park.
The maps compare the differences which have happened in the village
park
ten years ago and the present.
Overall
, the whole village
park
has experienced considerable changes and modernization than before. Looking at the details, the entrance remained in the same position
with
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ten
year
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years
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ago,
however
, a new cycle path has been constructed on the outer ring of the village
park
. The tennis court doubled in size compared to ten years before.
Apart from
this
, the football pitch and the car
park
have been enlarged
that
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the parking area increased its capacity from twenty vehicles to fifty.
Moreover
, the woods have been knocked down and made way for a new cafe.
Besides
this
, the pond on the south-eastern side of the map has been converted into a boating lake and a total new picnic area has been set up. The toilet was situated on the east side which was next to the football pitch.
Lastly
, the children's play field has been expanded in order to divide into two sections children's play area and children's soft play space.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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