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Every year several languages die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There is an ongoing debate on
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extinction
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 which happens several times every year. Some groups claim that the process of dying a
language
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 is of no importance. The logic behind
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 statement lies in the fact that they believe life would be easier if there were fewer
languages
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 in the
world
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 with which I deeply disagree.
Languages
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 are mediums through which people communicate with different members
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 society. It is through
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 of
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 that unique social
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conventions
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 get created and it is upon these
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 that culture appears.
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, culture and
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 are inseparable and
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 of one can result in adverse influences on the other.
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, if
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 die out the culture combined with the
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 will be influenced as well. On the surface, fewer
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 in the
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 may seem equal with more people speaking the same
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 and communicating effortlessly.
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,
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extinction
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 of
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 may create a more mundane
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 in which people have fewer communication tools to choose from. To make things clearer I would like you to picture a
tool box
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 in which there is only one
screw driver
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! You may have an easier time knowing what to use but the practicality will decrease
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 of limited tools and options. The same applies to
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,
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languages
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 in the
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 may seem easy but it will dramatically impact the extent to which we effectively communicate. All things considered, I believe the process of
extinction
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 of
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 has a huge negative impact on our lives by putting cultural diversity and
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 productivity of different
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 at risk.
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,
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 be counted as a trivial incident.
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Task Achievement
For task achievement, it is expected to provide a more balanced argument with clear reasoning for your position. Both sides of the argument should be considered and discussed before providing a reasoned conclusion. Examples used should be relevant and specific to the point being made to enhance clarity and argument strength.
Coherence and Cohesion
The coherence and cohesion of the essay would benefit from more varied linking words and phrases to help ideas flow more naturally. As for cohesion, aiming to create more complex structures when linking ideas or paragraphs will improve the readability and sophistication of your argument.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Endangered languages
  • Homogenization
  • Multilingualism
  • Language preservation
  • Cognitive benefits
  • Global communication
  • Intellectual diversity
  • Ecological knowledge
  • Cultural traditions
  • Communication barriers
  • Preservation efforts
  • Technological solutions
  • Language revival
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