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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages fo studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages.

#university #students #part #studies #fo
Study plays a vital role in every
persons
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 life. Some
children's
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learns
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 a lot from their
culture
 or some from outside of their
culture
, I feel that studying abroad is more beneficial as compared to studying in own
country
. I am going to explain my views in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, kids can learn about the various
culture
, when they come to
the
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 different
country
 they
seees
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see
 so many people with different backgrounds. It is
the
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 beneficial time for them to learn about something new. They can learn about their
culture
, their backgrounds and
also
 about their language and lifestyle too.
To
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according to
 the newspaper report of 2012, most
of
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the
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children's
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children
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 are getting married in different cultures
as well
as
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and
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 they are doing their jobs in different
culture
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cultures
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too
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apply
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.
This
 is the proud moment of their life.
Furthermore
,
children
 can learn more about their
day to day
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task
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 because most of the time they
did
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 not get
chance
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a chance
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 to do work
at
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in
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 their home
country
 because their parents do not want
too
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to
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. But in a different
country
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country,
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 they can improve their skills like cooking or playing any game. They can make their career in that.
To conclude
, it is best for
children's
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children
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 to
doing
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 studies in different
country
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countries
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 because they can learn about so many different things from their own or from other people.
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