In some countries fast food restaurants and supermarket gives money to schools to promote their products. Do you think this is a positive or negative development

It is common to see the growth in commercial advertisements of fast

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chains and

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supermarket

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to be displayed at

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in some countries.

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can be a clever way to promote the products,

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kind of advertising, in my opinion, is unconstitutional and it will have negative impacts on the younger generation. On the one hand, fast

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and

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promotions with the targeted audiences of

students

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will have negative influences on their lifestyle and diet. One of the most prominent

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students

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, especially young ones, love to eat junk foods and sweets.

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, many fast

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restaurants and

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supermarket

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will tend to commercialize unhealthy

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as chocolate, french fries, hamburger and many more.

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,

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will increase the

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' demand

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fast foods and junk foods, exposing them to many other crucial problems.

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, increasing children's sugar and fat consumption can result in obesity and many other chronic diseases

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as diabetes and high blood pressure.

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is unconstitutional and illegal because

schools

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can not use their learners as a way to produce income. Regarding the fact that

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accept

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money from those companies and expose children to a detrimental diet and lifestyle,

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can be considered an act of corruption.

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, if

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were to make income by

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, they had to at least verify the benefits and negative effects of what would be displayed.

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,

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should only accept the deals of advertisements that can

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students

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universities

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scholarships,

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courses and education books. In conclusion, commercializing fast

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and

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supermarket

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within

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is happening in some countries. In fact, those advertisements are

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inappropriate

and can lead to many other health problems which are, in my opinion, significant and detrimental.