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The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The map describes the two options probable that
this
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 company might to
built
Wrong verb form
build
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 a new
restaurant
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 in the
center
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centre
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 of Paris.
Overall
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, the number of
visitors
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are
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is
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 the highest
benefits
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benefit
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 that will get the big profits in both locations.
Location
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 1 is on the
north-west
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northwest
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 side of the map and between the crossroad and the park. What is more, the
restaurant
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 is
in
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on
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 the north side of Bir Hakeim
bridge
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Bridge
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 and opposite the sports
center
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centre
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. Interestingly,
this
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location
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 is a good option to build because of approximately 10000
visitors
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 from the Maritime Museum and the Aquarium
where
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which
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they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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are in the top of middle and the top of the right corner.
Location
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 2 has a possible
location
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 for a new
restaurant
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. It is in front of the River Seine and between the Eiffel Tower and
art
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the art
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 gallery.
Additionally
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, there is a great benefit that around 17000
visitors
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 come from the left side of the map to
this
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restaurant
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.
Furthermore
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, the
visitors
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 will come there to eat lunch and
then
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 they have some
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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option
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options
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 to enjoy life.
For instance
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, they can travel to
art
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an art
the art
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 gallery in the morning and
then
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 climb the Eiffel Tower with a beautiful top view of Paris by night.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words restaurant, visitors, location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prime location
  • pedestrian traffic
  • commercial area
  • accessibility
  • landmarks
  • tourist attractions
  • local clientele
  • dining establishment
  • culinary scene
  • footfall
  • lease terms
  • business district
  • market analysis
  • target demographic
  • urban planning
  • zoning regulations
  • competitive analysis
  • public transport links
  • patronage
  • culinary niche
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