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The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a newrestaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a newrestaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
#centre #paris #company #newrestaurant #area #two #locations #restaurant
In the
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 Paris,
it
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is
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well known
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well-known
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 for the
Eiffel
tower
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Tower
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, Around the
Eiffel
tower
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Tower
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had
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 a lot of options for visitors to visit
in
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apply
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. In the corner left right of the map, it
have
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 the art gallery, around 700
visiotrs
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visitors
 visit each day! on the left side of the
Eiffel
tower
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Tower
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, they have
Metro
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a Metro
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 Station and Sport Center, Across to the river, the opposite
have
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 the Maritime Museum on the west and the Aquarium on the East inside! The Seine River is surrounded
in
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by
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 the heart of the city and has 3
bridge
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bridges
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 crossing it,
in
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apply
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older from left to right: Birhakeim
bridge
,
lena
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Lena
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bridge
 and
finally
 Debilly
bridge
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Bridge
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. Because of the immense popularity of the
Eiffel
tower
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Tower
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, many restaurants sprung up near the
tower
 to be able to admire the
tower
's nighttime beauty.
Location
 1 is located facing the west,
location
 2 is located between the
Eiffel
tower
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 and the art gallery. It is not difficult to know which place will attract more tourists. When they need to go to Paris to see the iconic
tower
.
Location
 2 will attract more tourists when there are 3 famous places to visit. If
location
 1 only attracts 10, 000 visitors per day
then
location
 2 will attract 17, 250 visitors.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words eiffel, tower, bridge, location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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