The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the percentage share of the Brazilian economy in various industries, including finance, food processing, manufacturing, tourism and oil, coal and gas, in 2009, 2019 and 2029.
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, it is
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that the percentage share of the Brazilian economy in the financial sector is expected to rise gradually, as has happened in previous years, and its index is the highest in every given year.
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contrast,
industrial
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sector
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only
decreasing
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through
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while
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other sectors
fluctuating
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. Starting with finance, it started at just above
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30% in 2009. After increasing by 5% in 2019, it is expected to reach approximately 41% in 2029. Manufacturing started at just above 20%. It is revealed to hit a low at 5% in 2029, after
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decline in 2019. Food processing is expected to stay at the same level in 2029, as it was about 10% in 2019, despite a sharp rise in 2019
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when the figure riched about 21%. The same bars can be seen in oil, coal and gas started and expected to be at about 25%, despite a rise to 30% in 2019. The share of tourism amounted to about 25% in 2009. After a slight decrease in 2019, it will maintain the same level at above
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20% in 2029.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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