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The charts below show the distribution of world's water and the use of water in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the distribution of world's water and the use of water in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The rendered set of pie charts illustrates the distribution of the world's
water
,
while
 the bar graph provides the information regarding use of
water
 in three main countries namely Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada. The data has been calibrated in terms of percentage.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that
the
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apply
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salt
water
have
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has
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 the highest proportion and the largest amount of
water
 is used in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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sector
 and industry
sector
.
According to
 the given data, in all
water
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categories
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category
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category,
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 the figure shows 3% of fresh
water
 and 97% was salt
water
 from
Ocean's
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oceans
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.
Moreover
, the highest proportion of 79% was considered in
fresh
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freshwater
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water
 which is from ice and glaciers.
Therefore
, 1% of surface
water
 was freshed.
Lastly
, nearly 20% of
ground
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groundwater
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water
 was considered to be drinking
water
. Moving
further
, Egypt
as well as
 Saudi Arabia spent
highest
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the highest
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 amount of percentage in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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sector
 80% and nearly 78% respectively,
Whereas
 the least amount of
water
has been
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was
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 used in
domestic
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the domestic
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 and industrial
sector
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sectors
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.
Furthermore
, Canada
use
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uses
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 80% of
water
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its water
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 in industrialization.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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