University students always focus on one specific subject, but some people think that universities should encourage their students to study a wide range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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one
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is quite popular among undergraduates in order to
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give more focus
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one
major curriculum
instead
of studying an extra syllabus.
This
trend provides more
workload
along with
stress.
Therefore
, I strongly disagree with
this
statement for the following reasons.
To begin
with,
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only
one
major
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in college time
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students
can get better
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in
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their final
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exams
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and they will obtain
a better job positions
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. Adding extra majors in university can lead to
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more
workload
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in order to they will be given extra effort and time to prove and pass the examinations.
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,
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medical
students
choose
one
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in universities,
therefore
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more
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to
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hard in
one
syllabus.
Hence
, in my opinion, I think studying more curriculums can bring
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workload
to
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university learners
undoubtedly
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.
Moreover
, learning extra subjects
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university periods can lead to
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stress and depression,
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they might
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suicides
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. Because
of
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they do not
handles
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more
works
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work
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simultaneously.
For example
, a recent survey said that more than 60% of
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universities
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learners suffer
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from depressions
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depressions
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due to
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handle more
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work
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in
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one
time.
Then
,
students
should select only
one
major syllabus
instead
of
add
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extras.
To conclude
, learning
one
main stream
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mainstream
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will give more benefits to the college scholars rather than selecting more
curriculams
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curriculums
curriculum
in order to avoid stress and
workload
.
Then
, I strongly disagree with
this
statement in the above-mentioned details and I hope
this
process brings enormous
beneficials
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benefits
to society.
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