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Band 5.5

You are preparing an event in the countryside. Write a letter to your friend and ask for help with the arrangements. In your letter, •describe the event •mention what arrangements have already been made •say how your friend can help

#event #countryside #friend #arrangements #•describe #•mention #•say
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Dear Fahim, I hope you are in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about the event we are going to arrange in
countryside
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the countryside
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next month. In
this
 winter season, with a view to helping the poor people living in
village
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the village
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 area, our charity firm decided to organize a charity program in
remote
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a remote
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 area.
On
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 my way of thinking, the place where you live will be the best to distribute some winter clothes among the
underpriviledged
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underprivileged
 people. Please note that we have already arranged
required
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the required
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 blankets,
transportation
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and transportation
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 to make
this
 event successful.
Furthermore
, we need
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support from you regarding the arrangements of accommodation and food during the event days. We have planned to stay in
this
 place for two days. Since you are originally from
this
 place, I strongly believe that it will help us
as well as
 you to get the expected support from you. As far as I am concerned, you are very
much
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popular because of your social activities. I am looking forward
for
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 your kind help and reply regarding
this
 matter. Yours lovingly, Faisal
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and all sentences within the paragraph coherently support that idea.
coherence cohesion
Avoid abruptly jumping between ideas within the same paragraph.
task achievement
Provide a clear overview of the event as well as specific details about how your friend can assist to strengthen task achievement.
task achievement
Maintain a more consistent register and level of formality throughout your letter to match the informal, yet respectful tone suitable for writing to a friend.
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