The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.
The line graph gives information about the distribution of tourists in Brighton's four attraction sites between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, it is evident that the
pavilion
was the most popular,
while
the pier was the least
favored
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throughout most of the period. Meanwhile, the share of festivalgoers remained relatively unchanged during the thirty years. The graph details reveal that the
pavilion
experienced a drastic increase from its 1980 figure of 25%, reaching a pinnacle of just below 50% in 1995.
In contrast
, the art gallery's share commenced at 22% in 1980, almost similar to that of the
pavilion
, moderately rose to around 38% in 1985, yet plunged back to 20% in 1990. From 1995 onwards, both the
pavilion
and art gallery settled into a decline, dropping to just above 30% and 9% in 2010, respectively.
Conversely
, around 30% of the
travelers
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went to the festival steadily, and it maintained second place in the popularity ranking from 1990 to 2010. In the pier's case, after hovering around roughly 13% for the first twenty years, it witnessed definitive growth in 2000, surpassing the footfall in the art gallery in 2005 and reaching 22% in 2010.
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