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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.
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The graphic demonstrates the Gross Domestic Product generated by the IT and
Service
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 industry in Great Britain from 1992 to 2000.
Overall
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, the main facts that stand out are that both increased as a proportion of GDP,
in contrast
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,IT remained at a higher rate at that time. At the beginning of the period, in 1992, the
Service
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 industry exceeded 4 per
cent
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 of GDP,
whereas
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 IT accounted
this
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 over 6 per
cent
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. Over the next four years, the levels were more similar, with both components standing between 6 and 8 per
cent
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.
Although
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, IT was still higher than the
Service
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, though it dropped slightly from 1994 to 1996.
However
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, over the following 4 years, the patterns of the two components were noticeably different the percentage of the
Service
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 industry went up gradually until reaching only 8 per
cent
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,
while
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 IT depicted quite a sharp increase to 12 in 1998 and
then
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 nearly 15 in 2000.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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