The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
The maps compare the present status of the centre area of the city Islip, which is a minuscule town, with its figures after future developments.
Overall
, a dual carriageway will be established based on the development procedure in which a shopping centre, transportation station, and parking lot are surrounded by novel dual carriage roads
as well as
new residential areas. The main road will be exclusively allocated to pedestrians and the park will be dwindled. The most outstanding roadway change will be the invention of the dual carriageway which links park and school paths on the southeast and southwest on the bottom half of the map.
Also
, the countryside will be transplanted with the northern part of the carriageway. The main road is planned to be turned over to a pedestrian path. The newly constructed residential zone is accessible via the east road.
Additionally
, many facilities will be implemented after the city centre is developed
such
as a carpark and bus station on top of the pedestrian way
that is
currently a part of the shopping region
that is
along the countryside. A new housing region will be implemented on the left side of the park and the other one will be
at the end
of the new eastern
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