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The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative. The overall technology has been positive . What are your opinion on this?

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The
internet
 has changed our daily life in some aspects. In my opinion,
majority
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 of the changes are
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beneficial
 for us
however
 there are
also
 some disadvantages that we could figure
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out in the future. First of all, the
internet
 could increase the opportunity for ordinary people to contact the broader world.
This
 is because to record their life, a lot of students or
professiors
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professors
 would choose to upload their
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 or work on the
internet
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ordinary people would see the bigger world.
on the other hand
, more attention
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the public who
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low literacy may be jealous
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others.
As a
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 the
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cyber
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emerged
merged
. Fortunately, the government has implied some laws and punishments to prevent that from arising.
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Secondly
, for study, the
internet
 provides more chances for us to learn and improve.
For instance
, some learning materials have been uploaded on the
internet
 that could guarantee us to learn it repeatedly until we are satisfied with the study effect.
Overall
, even though there are some disadvantages
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 the
internet
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we can figure it out.
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