he graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the
number
of men and women who became gym
members from 1980 to 2010. Overall
, the number
of men’s
gym
memberships
fluctuated dramatically, while
the number
of women’s
memberships
fluctuated steadily. The men's number
was higher than the women’s
number
at the beginning of the period; however
, the women’s
membership increased gradually and had a higher number
than the men’s
at the end
.To begin
with, 2000 men’s
gym
membership was higher than the women's recorded in 1950. The number
dramatically fluctuated and rose to its peak in 1985 and 2005, with 4000 and 5000 memberships
, respectively. However
, the men’s
number
fell in 1995 and 2010, with fewer than 2000 and 1000 members, respectively.Next,
more than 1000 women joined gym
memberships
in 1980. The number
increased gradually and reached its peak in 1985, 1985, and 2005, with approximately 2000, 3000, and 3000 members, respectively. Although
the number
decreased at the end
of the period, the women’s
number
of gym
memberships
was higher than the men’s
.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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