he graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the
number
of men and women who became Use synonyms
gym
members from 1980 to 2010. Use synonyms
Overall
, the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
men’s
Use synonyms
gym
Use synonyms
memberships
fluctuated dramatically, Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
women’s
Use synonyms
memberships
fluctuated steadily. The men's Use synonyms
number
was higher than the Use synonyms
women’s
Use synonyms
number
at the beginning of the period; Use synonyms
however
, the Linking Words
women’s
membership increased gradually and had a higher Use synonyms
number
than the Use synonyms
men’s
Use synonyms
at the end
.Linking Words
To begin
with, 2000 Linking Words
men’s
Use synonyms
gym
membership was higher than the women's recorded in 1950. The Use synonyms
number
dramatically fluctuated and rose to its peak in 1985 and 2005, with 4000 and 5000 Use synonyms
memberships
, respectively. Use synonyms
However
, the Linking Words
men’s
Use synonyms
number
fell in 1995 and 2010, with fewer than 2000 and 1000 members, respectively.Use synonyms
Next,
more than 1000 women joined Linking Words
gym
Use synonyms
memberships
in 1980. The Use synonyms
number
increased gradually and reached its peak in 1985, 1985, and 2005, with approximately 2000, 3000, and 3000 members, respectively. Use synonyms
Although
the Linking Words
number
decreased Use synonyms
at the end
of the period, the Linking Words
women’s
Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
gym
Use synonyms
memberships
was higher than the Use synonyms
men’s
.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, gym, men’s, memberships, women’s with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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