he graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
number
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of men and women who became
gym
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members from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, the
number
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of
men’s
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gym
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memberships
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fluctuated dramatically,
while
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the
number
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of
women’s
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memberships
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fluctuated steadily. The men's
number
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was higher than the
women’s
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number
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at the beginning of the period;
however
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, the
women’s
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membership increased gradually and had a higher
number
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than the
men’s
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at the end
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.
To begin
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with, 2000
men’s
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gym
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membership was higher than the women's recorded in 1950. The
number
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dramatically fluctuated and rose to its peak in 1985 and 2005, with 4000 and 5000
memberships
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, respectively.
However
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, the
men’s
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number
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fell in 1995 and 2010, with fewer than 2000 and 1000 members, respectively.
Next,
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more than 1000 women joined
gym
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memberships
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in 1980. The
number
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increased gradually and reached its peak in 1985, 1985, and 2005, with approximately 2000, 3000, and 3000 members, respectively.
Although
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the
number
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decreased
at the end
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of the period, the
women’s
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number
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of
gym
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memberships
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was higher than the
men’s
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, gym, men’s, memberships, women’s with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • membership trends
  • male and female comparison
  • notable increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • consistently
  • peak points
  • divergent patterns
  • parallels in trends
  • correlation
  • timeframe
  • cultural shifts
  • awareness of fitness
  • significant differences
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