he graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the
number
of men and women who became
gym
members from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, the
number
of
men’s
gym
memberships
fluctuated dramatically,
while
the
number
of
women’s
memberships
fluctuated steadily. The men's
number
was higher than the
women’s
number
at the beginning of the period;
however
, the
women’s
membership increased gradually and had a higher
number
than the
men’s
at the end
.
To begin
with, 2000
men’s
gym
membership was higher than the women's recorded in 1950. The
number
dramatically fluctuated and rose to its peak in 1985 and 2005, with 4000 and 5000
memberships
, respectively.
However
, the
men’s
number
fell in 1995 and 2010, with fewer than 2000 and 1000 members, respectively.
Next,
more than 1000 women joined
gym
memberships
in 1980. The
number
increased gradually and reached its peak in 1985, 1985, and 2005, with approximately 2000, 3000, and 3000 members, respectively.
Although
the
number
decreased
at the end
of the period, the
women’s
number
of
gym
memberships
was higher than the
men’s
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, gym, men’s, memberships, women’s with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • membership trends
  • male and female comparison
  • notable increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • consistently
  • peak points
  • divergent patterns
  • parallels in trends
  • correlation
  • timeframe
  • cultural shifts
  • awareness of fitness
  • significant differences
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