The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar

chart

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depicts the number of

male

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males

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and

female

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females

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who

partecipated

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participated

participate

in evening courses at an education

center

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centre

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for adults in 2009. The pie

chart

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shows us the age of these

partecipants

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participants

Overall

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, evening courses were more popular for

women

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. Most

partecipants

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participants

were over 50 or middle-aged. Looking at the bar

chart

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, we can see quite a difference between the two sexes. The course with the highest number of enrolled students was Language

and

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apply

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40 of them were

women

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and only 20

men

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were men

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On the other hand

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, the sculpture class seemed more popular

between

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among

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men: with 10 male students and around 5

women

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. For painting the interest rate looked quite even between the two sexes, with 25 men and 30

women

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enrolled. Regarding the pie

chart

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, evening courses have only

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apply

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5% of students who are under 20 years old. 42% of them

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are

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50 or over and 25% are between 40 and 59, making

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this

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these

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evening classes quite popular for middle-aged.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

163 words

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