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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate how the industrial zone in the city of Norbition is going to develop in the future. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that the
road
 network will be developed and become complicated.
Further
, all the factories will be replaced by housing schemes. A bridge will be constructed over the river
while
 adding
few
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a few
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 new buildings
in to
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into
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 the society.
To begin
 with, the farmland area will be
undergone
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undergoing
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constructing
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construction
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new
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of new
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 houses with
a
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an
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 access
road
 from the
round-about
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roundabout
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. A fresh bridge will be established over the
rever
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river
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 to give
the
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apply
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access to farmland.
Further
, another minor
round-about
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roundabout
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 will be built
while
 improving the complexity of the
road
 network significantly. A drastic conversion can be seen in the proposed map regarding the housing. All the established factories in
existing
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 map will be replaced by houses. Despite the straight
road
 in
south
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the south
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 corner. The major change is adding new buildings to the proposed plan to enhance the facilities in
the
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apply
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Norbition
city
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City
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. A playground, school, medical centre and a number of shops will be
appreared
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appeared
appreciated
 in
modern
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the modern
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 plan rather than the current map.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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