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The line chart below shows the teenage pregnancy rates in selected countries - Australia, Sweden, the United States, and South Africa - from 1985 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the teenage pregnancy rates in selected countries - Australia, Sweden, the United States, and South Africa - from 1985 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart provides information about the
statistic
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statistics
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 of youth pregnancy in four countries which are Australia, Sweden, The United States
as well
as
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and
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 South Africa, which
established
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were established
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 between 1985 and 2019. It can be seen that South Africa is the only country which has
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fluctuating
fluctuated
number
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numbers
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while
 others are slightly
decline
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declining
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.
At the
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first,
South Africa,
that
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 is
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an undevelop
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undevelop
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undeveloped
 country among
fourth
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 of them, had
30
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a 30
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percentage
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 rate in 1985 and it increased
for
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over
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 two decades.
However
, it
was
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decreased back to the
begining
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beginning
number
at
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in
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 2019.
Moreover
, the only developing nation, which is The United States, was the highest
number of
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rate with approximately 43
percent
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 in 1985 and it fell
down of
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to
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 30% in 2019.
In addition
, the two latest states, which are Australia and Sweden, had only
5
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a 5
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% differentiation of average
number
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numbers
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 with 20% and 15% for the latter country, respectively. Both of them were decreased to 5% in 2019.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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