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The diagrams illustrate the changes which has taken place in a village park within decade.

The diagrams illustrate the changes which has taken place in a village park within decade.
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The diagrams illustrate the changes which
has
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 taken place in a village
park
 within 10 years. In general , it appears that
village
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the village
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park
 has become much more modern and everything in
this
located
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 correctly. One interesting change is that a picnic area has been built
,
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because 10 years ago there was an empty area the same
with
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as
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toilet
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the toilet
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, which is located to the east of the football pitch. When it comes to
football
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the football
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 pitch it did not
relocated
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, but, it
is
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was
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 reduced. Another
changes
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are
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is
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 that
,
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old
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the old
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 pond and woods in the south-east of the football pitch have been knocked down to make way new boating lake and cafe. Another big change is that a
children
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children's
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 play area
which
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apply
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has been divided
to
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into
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 two are and expanded like
tennis
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a tennis
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 court and car
park
. Over the past 10 years
a
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the
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 car
park
 was for 20 cars ,
however
, there is a place for 50 cars now.
Last
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The last
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 and interesting change is that a new cycle path has been made all around the
park
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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