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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own countries. Nowadays, they have more opportunities to study abroad. What are the advantages and the disadvantages of this development?

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In the years preceding to
this
 day, pupils who want to pursue higher education usually choose to stay in their own nation.
However
, in
this
 modern era, they have more chances to learn from other cultures and countries.
This
 essay will describe the pros and cons of
this
 issue. The notion of
this
 question is that there are two sides
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of
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 a coin in
this
 educational development. Studying abroad does come with various benefits.
For example
, in low-income countries, people who are
alumnis
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alumni
 of famous campuses overseas are seen as prestigious, trusted intellectuals
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 can help the
country
 grow.
On the other hand
, gaining knowledge from a place which has different cultures and values can generate creative ideas to be adapted to a developing
country
. Even so, pursuing education away from one's home
country
 can have some side effects. The first one
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 is that people can get homesick sometimes. It can
also
 interfere with a person's daily
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.
The
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second,
students need to adapt quickly
with
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 the new
country
's daily life and
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college
homeworks
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. In conclusion, going to a university outside a person's
country
 can have many advantages, but students need to face the challenges that they will encounter in their journey too.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunities
  • exposure
  • perspectives
  • academic
  • career
  • personal growth
  • development
  • language proficiency
  • communication skills
  • independence
  • self-confidence
  • costs
  • financial burden
  • homesickness
  • loneliness
  • cultural barriers
  • language barriers
  • adjustment difficulties
  • safety concerns
  • unfamiliar environment
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