many countries, paying for things using mobile phone app is becoming increasingly common. Does these development have more advantages or disadvantages?
Nowadays, technology plays
an
predominant role in everyone's life. Change the article
a
Therefore
, various mobile applications are being used for different purposes and one of them is online banking which is very common in this
modern world. While
there are some drawbacks but
it has numerous pros which are very helpful for individuals and Correct word choice
apply
this
essay will discuss both advantages
and disadvantages of Correct article usage
the advantages
this
notion.
On the one hand, there has been always risk
of hacking Add an article
the risk
a risk
the
online banking Correct article usage
apply
app
as Fix the agreement mistake
apps
the
cybercrime rates are rapidly increasing. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, offenders usually ask for authorization PIN from the users by using the
similar sites as the official sites by which they hack or freeze the account and steal money from people's Correct article usage
apply
account
. Fix the agreement mistake
accounts
Moreover
, you need an
internet access to use some Remove the article
apply
of
digital applications and several other problems Change preposition
apply
such
as low battery by which you are unable to pay for things.
On the other hand
, despite these cons
there are enormous examples of benefits of e-payments which cannot be denied. Add a comma
cons,
Correct article usage
The first
First
and foremost advantage is people do not Correct article usage
The first
to
carry Add a missing verb
have to
physical
Add an article
a physical
the physical
Fix the agreement mistake
cards
card
or cash with Fix the agreement mistake
cards
Correct pronoun usage
them
themselves
and Correct pronoun usage
them
not
Add a missing verb
are not
affraid
to forget money or Correct your spelling
afraid
Correct pronoun usage
their wallet
Correct pronoun usage
their wallet
wallet
. Fix the agreement mistake
wallets
Also
, individuals on
work or at home can order Change preposition
at
prior
by paying beforehand and no need to wait in queue for Rephrase
apply
long
time and saves Change the article
a long
thier
valuable time. Correct your spelling
their
Furthermore
, many grocery stores and restaurants encourage public
to pay digitally and offer Add an article
the public
discount
on various goods.
Fix the agreement mistake
discounts
To conclude
, online payments have few drawbacks but have so many advantages such
as time saving
, more Add a hyphen
time-saving
convenient
and essential. Replace the word
convenience
This
approach is very useful for people and this
technology is used widely over the world.Submitted by komalpreetkaur813 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
task achievement
Make sure your essay clearly addresses all parts of the question. It seems that your response may be somewhat generalized or not fully explore the depths of the prompt.
coherence cohesion
While you have correctly outlined the essay's structure with an introduction and conclusion, ensure that the transition between ideas is smooth and logical. Use a range of cohesive devices appropriately to achieve this.
task achievement
Back up your points with more specific examples. The essay has generalized statements that could be strengthened with real-life examples or relevant statistics.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?