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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comprasions where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comprasions where relevant.
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The chart shows the information about average weekly spending of
income
 by families in 1968 and in 2018.
Overall
,
this
 diagram
have
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 eight positions including food, housing etc. Both in 1968 and in 2018 major weekly
income
 spending was the food.
Whereas
 in 1968 food covered 35% of all salary, in 2018
results
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result
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 was
about
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apply
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just more than
a
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apply
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15%. Housing in 1968 required only 10% of
income
, but in 2018
this
 position was
rised
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raised
risen
up
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apply
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to less than a quarter of total
income
. Fuel and power in 1968 required a little bit more than in 2018, but
percentage
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the percentage
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 of clothing and
footware
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footwear
 was higher in 1968 than in 2018. People in 1968 averagely spent for household goods more than five per
cents
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cent
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. After 50 years
this
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these
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 values
isn't
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haven't
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 changed for a bit. Transport questions in 1968 required a small minority,
then
, in 2018 the same transport asked for 15% of all
income
. In conclusion,
this
 chart is a source of
the
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apply
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information about average weekly spending by families in 1968 and 2018. All the percentages
given
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are given
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 correctly and
mathes
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match
 the reality.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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