The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (line graph)

The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (line graph)
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of households which
ownED
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owned
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four different types of electronic
devices
(MP3 player, mobile phone, computer,tablet) over a
period
of 20 years (1995-2015).
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that at the beginning of the
period
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period,
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the percentage of people who used electronic
devices
was low,
although
the popularity of using all these
devices
rose, with MP3 players growing at a much slower pace. Looking at the details, the share of families who had mobile phones and computers started at a similar point at about 8% in 1995, which increased to 70% and 25% respectively in 2000.
Although
the figure for mobile phones (75%) was much more popular than for computers (43%) in 2003, the rate of these kinds of electronic equipment made up 95% in 2015.
In contrast
, even though the MP3 player was the most used at 12% in 1995, its figure rose slightly to 41% by the end of the
period
. The tablet was introduced only in 2003 ,
however
, it started to rise to 18% in 2007. The percentage of households with
devices
sharply rose to 62% in 2010, before growing to 82% by the end of the
period
.
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