Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is argued whether girls and boys should study in separate
schools
or they should attend mixed
schools
.
Although
studying in separate
schools
help
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both
genders to stay more focused towards their goals, I believe that co-educational
schools
help them to learn how to treat
opposite
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the opposite
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gender
in a respectful manner. A separate school environment is less distractive, which is why, some people think that it will benefit their
children
more than mixed
schools
.
Usually
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school-age
children
are more attracted towards the opposite
gender
. Going to separate
schools
minimizes the chances for them to get
involve
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in conversations with the opposite
gender
. With
this
, they would be able to concentrate more on their academics and achieve their desired goals.
For instance
, countries
such
as India and Pakistan promote
this
kind of schooling system, and it works well for them, as their
children
get less
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in
early age
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relationships and achieve good grades.
However
, it is a short-sighted view and will not help these countries
much
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to develop. Mixed
schools
,
on the other hand
, teach
both
genders about how to respect and understand the opposite sex. When
both
sexes interact and
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in activities together on a daily basis, they understand the topics that could be sensitive and can hurt someone's sentiments. By working together, they learn how to make comfortable each other and try to initiate
the
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conversations in a respectful manner. A particularly good example of
this
is weekly discussion sessions run by
mixed- school
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authorities, where
both
boys and girls work together in groups, debate and
also
compete with each other without any inferiority and bullying in a harmonious way.
For
this
reason, I believe that mixed
schools
are more beneficial than separate
schools
. In conclusion, I believe that coeducational
schools
teach
children
how to treat the opposite
gender
respectfully and sensibly,
while
separate
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schooling system emphasizes
much on
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how to help
children
to be more focused.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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