The chart below shows the changes in the average price in the UK from 1998 to 2018

The chart below shows the changes in the average price in the UK from 1998 to 2018
The next line graph illustrates the
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cost of five specific foods in England, namely
bread
,
milk
, cereal,
marmalade
and
chicken
between the years 1993 and 2018.
Overall
, in both years 1993 and 2018 the most important behaviours were the high cost of cereal and
chicken
wings, which had important changes
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the
milk
rose dramatically
while
bread
remained
in
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the lowest cost in 2018. The fluctuations of the
marmalade
were
slightly
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and changed to the third to
second
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cheaper position. Between 2003 and 2008, we can appreciate two contrasting changes,
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the value the
chicken
wings and cereal
drop
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dropped
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steadily the other
ingredient
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ingredients
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rose in different
proportion
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.
On the other hand
, between 2008 and 2010 the effect was contrary,
whereas
chicken
wings and cereal
increase
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, the
marmalade
and
milk
decrease
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except
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the
bread
, which
its
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continued
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grow until 2018. During
this
period is important to highlight the soar
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of cereal up to 2018.
On the other hand
, in 2013 the
milk
and
bread
overcome
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the
chicken
wing and
marmalade
, respectively.
However
, in 2018 the situation
changes
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and
chicken
wing and
marmalade
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their position in values of 2.2 and 1.4, respectively.
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contrary
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of
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that
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, the value of the
milk
and
bread
were positioned
in
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2 and 1.2
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Vocabulary: Replace the words bread, milk, marmalade, chicken with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average price
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Stability
  • Inflation rate
  • Economic recession
  • Taxation
  • Consumer impact
  • Trend analysis
  • Sector-specific trends
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Price index
  • Consumer Price Index (CPI)
  • Purchasing power
  • Economic indicators
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