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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional food and traditional ways of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The popularity of
convenience
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foods
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 has been increasing day by day eventually taking the place of conventional food and the conventional preparation of homemade food. I personally agree with
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 opinion. The dependency on
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, and unhealthy
foods
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 among
people
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 leads to excessive access to these
foods
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.
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,
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convenience
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foods
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 are low in nutrients they are ready to consume.
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, grocery stores are fully packed with
convenience
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foods
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, companies are advertising these
foods
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 to attract
people
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 so,
people
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 are getting more inclined to these kinds of
foods
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 leaving behind healthy, homemade
foods
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.
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, the lives of
people
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 in recent times are busy and hectic and
people
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 are more interested in earning money for their survival ignoring their wellbeing.
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, most of the young generation in the USA is fully dependent on
convenience
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foods
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 because they are no
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 interested in time-consuming homemade cooking. So they mostly depend on the sorts of
foods
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 which are easily available and that leads to the prevalence of
convenience
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foods
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. It is undeniable that
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 the habit of cooking at home is disappearing among
people
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 especially who are working outside.
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, the heritage of traditional methods of cooking and the taste of traditional food is forgotten by
people
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.
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, a significant proportion of
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 my home country do not even know the taste of traditional dishes and are ignorant of the traditional way of cooking
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 we have a rich heritage of traditional way of cooking. It happens only because of the excessive availability and popularity of
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foods
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, conventional
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 and cooking methods are disappearing in the era of
convenience
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foods
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 which should not be tolerated anymore.
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 of
convenience
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foods
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, we should promote the health benefits of conventional
foods
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.

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