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With an increasing population communication via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, with the
advanced
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 of technology human
being
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beings
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 are able to communicate with others by using different kinds of functions which are provided by
teir
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their
smartphone
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smartphones
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.Smartphones
allows
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people
 to
comuunicate
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communicate
 with others through the internet,text messaging and fact time.To
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, some argue that as the
populatoin
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population
 is increasing
with
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 an unexpected speed,
face to
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face-to-face
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face
communication
 will be replaced by
the
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technology.In
this
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 I
wiill
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will
 examine the reason
of
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why
face to
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face-to-face
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face
communication
 would not become a past thing. To start with,
face to
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face
communication
provide
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 a lot more caring.Technology allows
people
 to talk with their family and friends at
anytime
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any time
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 anywhere even
they
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if they
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 are living in
another countries
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,Which means that it provides a
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 compression.By using text
message
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messages
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, phone
call
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calls
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 and
face
 time
people
 are able to chat with their friends and family about
how
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what
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that
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they
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 have been through.
However
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 using
internet
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the internet
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 as a
communication
methods
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 is way
more
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worse than you think.
Due to
 the fact that
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face
communication
 allows
people
 to have
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first person
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 experience,
instead
 of talking behind the screen.When it
come
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 to
face
 to
face
communication
,
people
 are able to not only talk but
also
 take care of their family.It gives them
a
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physically
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 and
mentally
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 caring for them.
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coherence cohesion
It's important to structure your essay clearly by including an introduction that paraphrases the prompt and outlines your position, a body that discusses points with supporting arguments, and a conclusion that summarizes your essay and reiterates your main points. Always strive for a logical progression of ideas. In the essay provided, the structure and organization of the content need improvement to clearly convey your points.
task achievement
In terms of task response, you must fully address all parts of the task. Ensure you express a clear position throughout the response and adequately develop your argument with explanation and examples. The provided essay needs development in terms of fully addressing the prompt and supporting its claims.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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