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The illustration below show how coffee is sometimes produced.

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The diagram gives information regarding how coffee production can be ready .
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 ,there are different distinct
step
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begining
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begins
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 with the beans sorting and ending with packing and delivering to the consumption for
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calling
. The
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process
 commences with all
coffe
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coffee
 beans
are
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sorted manually before they are cleaned . After
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second stage products are dried under the sun
two
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 couple weeks almost one month . Gradually they are raked and turned in order to they are stored in silooo. After
completed
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this
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 stage products
are send
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 to
mill
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so as
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 hulling by hand . Hulling is completed ,
all
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 of them are
grading
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 in order to
bagging
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.
Finally
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 majority of
cofee
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coffee
are
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 sold but others
again
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are roasted .
As a result
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 of
this
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 stage new
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products
product
produce
produu
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products
 are packed to
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sell
sall
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sell
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to use a clear and logical sequence when describing processes or illustrations. Construct paragraphs in a way that each stage of the process follows logically from the one before.
coherence cohesion
Include both an introduction and a conclusion in your essay. The introduction should give an overview of the process, while the conclusion should either summarize the main points or state the final outcome of the process.
coherence cohesion
Support your descriptions with clear and specific examples where possible. The aim is to make your points easier to understand and more illustrative for the reader.
task achievement
Ensure you cover all parts of the task. Your essay should describe every stage of the process from start to finish.
task achievement
To achieve clarity, organize your ideas comprehensively. Take care to describe each step of the process in a manner that is easy for the reader to understand and follow.
task achievement
Use specific vocabulary related to the topic, and give detailed examples for each step or stage of the process. This will enhance the relevance and clarity of your essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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