Some people believe that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matter is the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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code
is significant
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a significant
dress
whether formal of
informal Correct your spelling
or
instead
of their work performance. I strongly disagree with this
statement because dress
code
plays a crucial part in the working environments
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environment
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essay will discuss it briefly for the following reasons.
To begin
with, Formal
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a Formal
dress
code
can bring more disipline
among the Correct your spelling
discipline
workers
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workers
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this
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than
environments
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to
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for
workers
in
more than three decades, the employees Change preposition
for
also
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to their
in
office time.
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during
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in working
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along with
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because
formal
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a formal
dress
code
provides more professionalism. For instance
, a recent survey conducted by the NGO said that,
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apply
workers
like to wear formal dress
when they go to office
in working Add an article
the office
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environments
and they feel more comfortable to
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apply
dress
.
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, the
employers should care about their Correct article usage
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workers
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builds
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self-confidence
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in disciplined
environments
. Therefore
, I strongly disagree with this
statement in the above-mentioned details.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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