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The table illustrates the expenses of advertising for four car companies in the UK in 2002.

The table illustrates the expenses of advertising for four car companies in the UK in 2002.
All in all, four
companies
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 spent a lot of money on TV advertisements,
while
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 that of the cinema was the lowest. The advertising higher
of
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apply
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payment for advertisement
it
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apply
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was
Renault
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 in five types: cinema, press, outdoor, radio, and TV. To
began
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begin
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 with,
TV
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for TV
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 advertising, Cetirizine spent
highest
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the highest
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amounted
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amount
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 of money with 70
million
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 dollars, compared to those of the car
companies
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was
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apply
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Renault
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, Rover and
Vauxhall
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 with 59
million
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 dollars, $45
million
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 and $65
million
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 respectively for payment the advertisement in the United Kingdom in 2002. As
apposed
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opposed
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, the advertising for radio spending on $15
million
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 for four
companies
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while
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 for the cinema had lowest expenses. For each of them,
Renault
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 had $6
million
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 and
Vauxhall
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 had $5
million
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,
while
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 Rover and Cetirizine had no expenditures for
this
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 type. In terms of outdoor advertising,
Renault
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 and
Vauxhall
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 had equal expenditure, with 7
million
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, followed by Rover and Cetirizine, with only 2
million
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 and 3
million
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, respectively. In fact, the expenditures for advertising on the press of four
companies
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 were very unequal, with 45
million
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 for
Renault
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 and only 8
million
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 for
Vauxhall
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words companies, renault, million, vauxhall with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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