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The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (line graph)

The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (line graph)
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This
 graph illustrates the percentage of families owning 4 types of high-tech devices over 20 years.
Overall
,
this
 figure experienced an upward trend.
While
 there was a significant
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 in
Mp
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MP
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 3 players, the opposite could be seen in tablets. Standing at 18%, most of the
household
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households
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 had
a
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Mp
 3 player in 1995,
whereas
 the least belonged to
smart phones
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smartphones
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 and tablets with 8%.
This
 figure witnessed a gradual growth and reached 40% in 2015, the lowest.
Similarly
, before sharing the same percentage
at the end
 of
observed
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 period, at 8%, wireless
phone
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phones
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 and
MP
 3
player
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players
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 with 8% have
a
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 same
staring
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 point and they both increased moderately. On the
othe
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other
 hand, after computers
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 in 2003,
it
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 saw a considerable climb by 80% over 12 years and reached
top
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the top
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 2, just after MP3 and mobile
phone
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phones
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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