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Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email •Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn •Explain how your friend could learn this sport •Suggest that you both learn this sport together

#friend #lives #town #advice #sport #email #•recommend #•explain #•suggest
Dear Mohammad, I hope
this
 email finds you well. I hope your family and husband are all fine. I have found out that you need my advice about learning a new sport. First of all, if I were you, I would try to learn swimming. I know your foot hurts a lot because of the accident you had recently so
this
 sport is suitable for you and helps to reduce your pain.
Also
, since you have a sedentary lifestyle, swimming would assist you
to keep
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in keeping
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 in shape and
stay
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staying
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 healthy. I suggest you
to join
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 to the pool in my neighborhood.
Thera
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There
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 is an excellent trainer who would teach you how to swim.
Thus
, the fee is reasonable and you can get
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a student
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student
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a student
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 discount. Actually, if you decide to learn
this
 sport, I could
enroll
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 in the class too, since I have intended to learn
swimming
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to swim
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, but I have never had time and I think
this
 is a great opportunity for me to join you. Take care and do stay in touch, All the best, Saeid
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introduction and conclusion
You should ensure that you have an opening and a closing statement that clearly signal the beginning and end of your correspondence.
main points support
Main points could be developed more thoroughly with stronger supporting details or explanations.
idea linking
Try to maintain clear and coherent links between your main ideas and the examples you provide.
task expansion
You have covered the task sufficiently but could improve the response by expanding your ideas and giving specific details throughout the email.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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