Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email •Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn •Explain how your friend could learn this sport •Suggest that you both learn this sport together

Dear Mohammad, I hope
email finds you well. I hope your family and husband are all fine. I have found out that you need my advice about learning a new sport. First of all, if I were you, I would try to learn swimming. I know your foot hurts a lot because of the accident you had recently so
sport is suitable for you and helps to reduce your pain.
, since you have a sedentary lifestyle, swimming would assist you
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in shape and
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healthy. I suggest you
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to the pool in my neighborhood.
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is an excellent trainer who would teach you how to swim.
, the fee is reasonable and you can get
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a student
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discount. Actually, if you decide to learn
sport, I could
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in the class too, since I have intended to learn
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, but I have never had time and I think
is a great opportunity for me to join you. Take care and do stay in touch, All the best, Saeid
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