Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email •Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn •Explain how your friend could learn this sport •Suggest that you both learn this sport together

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Dear Mohammad, I hope

this

email finds you well. I hope your family and husband are all fine. I have found out that you need my advice about learning a new sport. First of all, if I were you, I would try to learn swimming. I know your foot hurts a lot because of the accident you had recently so

this

sport is suitable for you and helps to reduce your pain.

Also

, since you have a sedentary lifestyle, swimming would assist you

to keep

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in shape and

stay

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healthy. I suggest you

to join

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to the pool in my neighborhood.

Thera

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is an excellent trainer who would teach you how to swim.

Thus

, the fee is reasonable and you can get

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a student

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student

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discount. Actually, if you decide to learn

this

sport, I could

enroll

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in the class too, since I have intended to learn

swimming

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, but I have never had time and I think

this

is a great opportunity for me to join you. Take care and do stay in touch, All the best, Saeid

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introduction and conclusion

You should ensure that you have an opening and a closing statement that clearly signal the beginning and end of your correspondence.

main points support

Main points could be developed more thoroughly with stronger supporting details or explanations.

idea linking

Try to maintain clear and coherent links between your main ideas and the examples you provide.

task expansion

You have covered the task sufficiently but could improve the response by expanding your ideas and giving specific details throughout the email.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

176 words

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facilities
physical capabilities
interests
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online resources
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