The diagram below shows the process of milk production.

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The diagram provides information on the source of milky

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it is clear that

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there are eight various stages illustrated in the process . Commencing with grazing cows in the grass to get milk and ending with delivering products to an open-air market. The first stage starts majority of cows grazing in the grass before cows are milked by the machine a couple a day . After the previous stage is completed

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is put into refrigeration storage

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milk takers deliver daily

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to the Dairy section . In the Dairy section ,milky

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is divided into two groups. One group is utilised for making cheese cream butter , and

this

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kind of dairy food item. Another one is pasteurized and packaged in order to be luxurious

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comfortable for consumption. After completing all stages packaged product is delivered to supermarkets and shops for sale to citizens.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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4 paragraphs

152 words

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The diagram below shows the process of milk production.

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

It is more important for a building to be functional than beautiful. Architects should not worry about designing buildings as works of art. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.