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Some people think that family members are more important than friends. Do you agree or disagree?

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I would say that both of them are important. Because family and friends have their perspective roles, and they can always help you when you
needed
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need them
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. To my way of thinking, family is the place
that
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where
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 you grow up, spend your childhood with them, and the best support system in your life. At that moment, you feel emotional things
such
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feeling
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the feeling
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 of affection,
angry
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,
sad
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, etc.
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, you have
father
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a father
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, mother, and siblings who love you.
On the other hand
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, when you go to other places which are so far from your family, you have friends or best
friend
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friends
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 who are always beside you.
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, you can share
story
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a story
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 about your feeling that you feel.
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, when you
get
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 some problems in your office or college, you have
close
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a close
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 friend to tell
about
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you about
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 difficult
thing
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things
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 in your mind.
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, you can share about your love problems
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 and your secret that you do not have to tell
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your parents or siblings. They can
listen
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listen to
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 your story, and provide some feedback or
ide
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ideas
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 for you which can reduce overthinking. In conclusion, family has its role and it is the same as friends who
also
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 have their respective roles. If you need someone to share your secret story, you have
friend
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a friend
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.
Then
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,
family
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the family
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also
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 can be your good support system, when you back
to
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home.

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structure
Ensure the essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The introduction should present the topic and your position, while the conclusion should summarize your argument and restate your viewpoint.
content
Develop clear main points in each paragraph with supporting details. Each paragraph should contain one main idea that is developed with examples or explanations.
language
Include a variety of sentence structures and demonstrate control of grammar and vocabulary to clearly express ideas.
examples
Expand the essay by providing more specific examples and details to back up the points. Use real-life scenarios or hypothetical situations to illustrate your points more vividly.
cohesion
Connect ideas with a range of cohesive devices and ensure paragraphs flow smoothly from one to the next. Use linking words effectively to create cohesion.
task response
Address the question directly and maintain a clear position throughout your response. Make sure that every paragraph clearly relates to the task prompt and your viewpoint is consistent.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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