Some people think that family members are more important than friends. Do you agree or disagree?
I would say that both of them are important. Because family and friends have their perspective roles, and they can always help you when you
needed
. To my way of thinking, family is the place Wrong verb form
need them
that
you grow up, spend your childhood with them, and the best support system in your life. At that moment, you feel emotional things Correct word choice
where
such
as feeling
of affection, Add an article
the feeling
a feeling
angry
, Replace the word
anger
sad
, etc. Replace the word
sadness
Moreover
, you have father
, mother, and siblings who love you. Correct article usage
a father
On the other hand
, when you go to other places which are so far from your family, you have friends or best friend
who are always beside you. Fix the agreement mistake
friends
Then
, you can share story
about your feeling that you feel. Add an article
a story
the story
For example
, when you get
some problems in your office or college, you have Verb problem
have
close
friend to tell Add an article
a close
about
difficult Correct pronoun usage
you about
thing
in your mind. Fix the agreement mistake
things
Furthermore
, you can share about your love problems,
and your secret that you do not have to tell Remove the comma
apply
for
your parents or siblings. They can Change preposition
apply
listen
your story, and provide some feedback or Add the preposition
listen to
ide
for you which can reduce overthinking.
In conclusion, family has its role and it is the same as friends who Correct your spelling
ideas
also
have their respective roles. If you need someone to share your secret story, you have friend
. Add an article
a friend
Then
, family
Add an article
the family
also
can be your good support system, when you back to
home.Change preposition
apply
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structure
Ensure the essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The introduction should present the topic and your position, while the conclusion should summarize your argument and restate your viewpoint.
content
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language
Include a variety of sentence structures and demonstrate control of grammar and vocabulary to clearly express ideas.
examples
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cohesion
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task response
Address the question directly and maintain a clear position throughout your response. Make sure that every paragraph clearly relates to the task prompt and your viewpoint is consistent.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion