Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some believe that most
people
are persuaded to purchase things because of seeing advertising.
However
, some think that nowadays many
people
do not really care about it anymore. Advertisement is a good strategy to introduce
products
and
service
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services
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to the target market but not all
people
pay attention to see many different
type
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types
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of advertising. I believe that advertising in
this
Internet and digital era is powerful
to
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enough to
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make
people
buying
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buy
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products
and services.
In
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one hand, from some years ago up to now, the data shows that 70% of
people
buying things are influenced by advertising that they see. It shows that advertising is a good method used by companies in introducing their
products
to
the
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society.
For example
, a
smart phone
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smartphone
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brand
that is
Samsung,
they
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produce advertising about their new
products
and the advertising appear on
tv
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TV
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, online
media
, social
media
and billboard. In many kinds of channels that they use to show their advertising, it can reach many target buyers.
In
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other
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hand, not all
people
like to see advertising specifically in
this
digital era, they choose to use social
media
,
digital
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and digital
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media
which are paid
by
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for by
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them in order to avoid advertising.
For instance
, they pay for
youtube
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YouTube
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and
then
they cannot access the advertising because they do not focus on seeing
promotion
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the promotion
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of
products
. In conclusion, I believe that in
this
era of
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the Interet
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Internet
Interet
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many companies can
be succeed
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succeed
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in using advertising to promote their
products
because
people
can
be easy
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easily
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find
the
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advertising in online
media
and they can be easily influenced to buy
products
and services.
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Your introduction should provide a clearer background on the topic and your thesis statement should explicitly state your opinion. The conclusion should restate your thesis and summarize the main points of the essay without introducing new information.
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Support each main point with relevant and specific examples or data. This adds credibility to your arguments and helps the reader understand your perspective better. The examples should be detailed and directly related to the point you're trying to make.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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