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The table below shows the percentage of first year students who gave ‘very good’ rating to the resources provided by the college, for three courses.

The table below shows the percentage of first year students who gave ‘very good’ rating to the resources provided by the college, for three courses.
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The table gives
information
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 about the percentage of
first year
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students
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 who rated different aspects of their course as being ‘very good’.
Overall
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,
students
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 studying Commerce appeared to be the most pleased with the
resources
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 provided by the college for their course. An average of 94% of
first year
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students
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 studying Commerce found that their pre-course
information
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, teaching, and
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 were very good,
while
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 just over 80% found the printed
resources
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 and other
resources
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 to
also
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 be very good. Meanwhile, around 70% of Law
students
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 found their printed
resources
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, tutor, and pre-course
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 a very good standard. Around 60% rated the teaching as being very good,
while
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 80% rated the other
resources
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 as very good.
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, only 60% of Economics
students
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 found their pre-course
information
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 and other
resources
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 to be very good. The teaching and tutor were rated very good by at least 90% of
students
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, compared to just over 80% who voted the printed
resources
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 as being very good

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words information, students, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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