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Freedom of speech is vital in free society? Do you agree or disagree?

#freedom #speech #society
Now people are beginning to realise that in our days we can tell what do we want , where do we want and when do we want. So
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that people can now freely share their opinions? What is it freedom of speech
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 Freedom of speech is ability and feeling
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when you feel
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comfortable and unafraid
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 sharing ur mind. Right now
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 because for centuries people have not had the opportunity to live normally by sharing their thoughts with others. And
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that we all can be speakers. First , it is well
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 that literally in all secular and good countries there is freedom of speech, which already says quite a lot, namely that if you express your opinion on a public platform, you will not be sent to prison for it.
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I mean that being straightforward and to some extent rude will not make you a criminal or someone bad, because everyone who wants can support you, and vice versa.
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 I see
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interesting and good
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 our social media. You can ask “
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 you serious?» or «
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this
 complete nonsense?» But you would be absolutely wrong, because at the moment social networks are the environment that gives us the absolute right to SPEAK and SHARE our opinion, no matter how good or bad it may be. The same telegram channels and Instagram provide all the opportunities for
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 I wanna say that everything
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 in our hands and our mouths depend only
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear and logical structure, with ideas presented in an unsystematic manner. Appropriate paragraphing should be used to distinguish between introduction, main body, and conclusion. Use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to convey the main idea clearly.
coherence cohesion
The introduction needs to provide a clear thesis statement reflecting the candidate's position on the topic. Main points should be expanded with coherent arguments and supported by specific examples. Concluding statements should summarize the key points discussed, restating the candidate's view.
task achievement
The response to the task does fulfill the minimum requirements, but it needs to be more complete. The ideas presented should be developed more comprehensively. Clear and relevant examples should be used to support each point. The position taken by the candidate should be clear throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Pay close attention to grammar and sentence structure to enhance clarity. Avoid casual language and ensure that the tone is formal and academic. Work on accurate use of vocabulary and varied sentence structures to appropriately convey your points.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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