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The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years of 2013 to 2014.

The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years of 2013 to 2014.
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The given graph illustrates women's
unemployment
rater
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rates
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 in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. In general, in almost all regions
unemployment
 rating
decrased
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decreased
,
excepting
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except
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 Scotland, where
on the contrary
, the indicators have increased. We can see from the data that in Wales and Northern Ireland ratings were already low. By
the
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apply
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contrast, in England and Scotland
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 index
higher
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is higher
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 or rather above 6
percent
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per cent
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. The smallest difference was in England, where indicators
reduced
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were reduced
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only
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by only
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for
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apply
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0,3
percent
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per cent
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.
However
, there are only
for
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apply
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0,6
percent
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per cent
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 ratings changed in Scotland, but
unmeployment
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unemployment
 increased
comparing
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compared
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 to others. Wales is one of two countries that has
rating
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a rating
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less
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of less
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 than 6% and
unemployment
 there decreased from 5,4% to 5%,
that
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which
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 is not the best result.
Furthermore
, Northern Ireland showed the highest change, which decreased from 5,6% to 4,6%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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