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Some people think it is one of the best ways to solve the environmental problems by increasing the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a common belief that the use of fossil fuels in many vehicles is a cause of environmental concerns. I completely disagree that raising the price of
fuel
 for transportation can be one of the best solutions to alleviate
the
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environmental issues. There are several reasons why people should adopt other methods in order to solve the problems. First of all, increasing the price of
fuel
 can be a serious problem for low-income individuals. In a number of developing countries, vehicles play a crucial role in the economic activities of citizens, going to far distances or commuting to work.
In addition
, some people in developing countries may use vehicles to ensure their work-life balance.
For example
, they resolve their stress through travel using cars.
Secondly
. there are other factors more significantly contributing to environmental pollution. Many buildings around the world overuse electricity power from fossil
fuel
 systems
such
 as consistently turning on air conditioners or lights all day.
Also
, farmers destroy rainforests at a shocking rate in order to gain various resources and benefits.
Thus
, it is a more efficient solution for the governments to regulate laws and politics like these other factors. In conclusion,
Although
 some people believe that the best solution to mitigate environmental problems is to increase the price of
fuel
, I strongly disagree with
this
 claim because I think there are other methods to relieve environmental issues.
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Introduce more specific examples and data to support your arguments.
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Maintain a clear, consistent position throughout the essay to strengthen your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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