Computers are being used more and more in education and so there will soon be no role for the teacher in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over the
last
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two or three decades, technology has developed drastically, especially
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education
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.
Computers
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play a crucial role in
education
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at present and
the
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usage
are
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increased
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,
therefore
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, in the future, teachers will not be needed to teach. I strongly disagree with
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statement for the following reasons.
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with, the
professors
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professor's
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work will be not existed by
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because
computers
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are set by the programs, it only delivers what
already
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set. The
teachers
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teacher's
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role is not set by some programs, they have
own
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their own
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sense to analyse and teach
to
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students clearly without
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any
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,
the
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professor jobs are more
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in
job
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market
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around the world because they
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only teach students properly.
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,
computers
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will not
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the
lectures
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jobs in future.
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, when a person
teach
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in the educational
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while
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students can ask any doubts about
in
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their subject and they get a clear explanation from their trainers but it
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not possible when
computers
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teach.
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,
a
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manpower should be needed for setting programs about
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the course
a course
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course
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courses
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in
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education
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field, without manpower nothing is possible. Traditional
method
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of teaching
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need
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for
student's
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students'
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life
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in order to
they
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enhance their career and knowledge
through
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this
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.
To conclude
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, more and more usage of
computer
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means it will not dominate the teacher's role and job in the future. The
trainers
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trainer's
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work is
a
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significant
of
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the
education
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sectors
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.
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, I strongly disagree with
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statement in the above-mentioned details and I hope
this
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trend drives more benefits to the learners.
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