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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart provides information about the number of
accomodation
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accommodation
accommodations
 built
anually
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annually
manually
 in Derby and Nottingham between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
, the city of Derby had more new houses compared to
city
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the city
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 of Nottingham over the
period
. The year 2009 showed the highest number of
accomodation
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accommodation
development
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developments
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 in both cities.
According to
 the chart, the construction of new houses in Derby had an increase trend over the
period
. The creation of new urban
area
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areas
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 peaked at 350 in 2009
while
 it hit
lowest
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its lowest
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 point at around 54%
in
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between 2000 and 2001. The trend witnessed a
period
 of stability from 2003 to 2007 at just above 100.
In contrast
, the data showed a fluctuation over the
period
 through new housing in
Notthingham
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Nottingham
. The proportion hit the lowest
poin
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point
 twice in 2006 and 2007 at
rougly
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roughly
 below 10%. From 2000 to 2005, the trend did not change much with the
numbers
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number
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 of new houses just below 100. The figure reached its highest point with 250 in 2009, followed by the data from 2007 at slightly below 200 new
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
.
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