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YOU HAVE TO RECIEVE THIS EMAIL FROM WHO YOU WENT TO COLLEGE WITH. Do you know it will be five years since we finished college ? i think we should contact our friends and arrange to meet again.Have you got any ideas about what we could do to celebrat e and when? write and tell me jan write an email to jan : suggest a good way to celebrate with your old college friends explain when would be the best time for the celebrate offer to help organise the celebrate

#recieve #email #college #five #years #contact #friends #celebrat #e #jan #time #celebrate #offer #organise
Dear Jan,, How are you ? I hope
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 are doing fine. Time flies , can you imagine that
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this
 is five years since we parting
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together
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. You can come to Malaysia for one week or two to get
rest
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 from our jobs, we can do
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a lot of things
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going to Twins Tower and taking photos behind ,
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 we can
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 a popular dinner,
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 , we can travelling to the island and rent a tent as camping. I can contact our college friends on
Instagaram
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 idea ,and
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introduction
Ensure your essay begins with an appropriate greeting and moves directly into addressing the topic. Avoid informal language and try to correct punctuation, such as 'Dear Jan,, should be 'Dear Jan,'
structure
Improve coherence by organizing your ideas into clear paragraphs. One for the introduction, at least one for each main point in the body, and a final one for the conclusion.
linking
Enhance cohesion by using a variety of linking words to connect sentences and ideas. This also involves checking punctuation and avoiding repetition of linking phrases.
task response
Address all parts of the task question, articulating your suggestions clearly and elaborating on them with specific details. This involves suggesting a specific celebration, explaining your reasoning, and providing clear offers to help organize.
accuracy
Correct all grammatical and spelling errors for a more accurate and academic tone. This includes fixing typos, maintaining subject-verb agreement, and using the correct verb tenses.
development
Ensure each main point is developed with a clear topic sentence and supported by relevant details and examples to strengthen your argument.
conclusion
Formalize your sign-off with a proper conclusion summarizing the main points and stating your offer to help more directly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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